Trying to make it to the party by Asha

By Asha, Year 6

Written as part of Factory Feedback

Chapter 1

I woke up in bed with a big smile on my face, hoping that today is going to be a good day. Until I heard a fart from my sister while she’s sleeping, the smell filled the room. So I got up and went to the bathroom and washed my face, then I went and changed my clothes and had breakfast. I then got my bag ready for school, then I was waiting for my sister to get ready. She was in a hurry because she’s making us late to school and we don’t want to get detention after school because we have a party to go to. We then left the house at 8:30 am and we arrived at school at 9:21am. We were very late to school.


Chapter 2

Rrrrrring!! Ring!!

It’s 3:00pm that means we can go home but I and my sister have to stay an hour late. I need to find a way to escape from here I can’t just stay here and clean the school. Mmmm uhhuh while I will be cleaning I’ll go close to a window so I can open it and get out but that’s going to take me 30 minutes by that time they could’ve been half way through the party but it’s worth a try. Okay so I went close to that window which took me 10 minutes. Now I need to find the best time to do it. Okay it’s been 3 minutes I think its the best time to do it right now so then I open the window and run out, then I called my mum to come and pick me up, I waited around for 20 minutes until my mum arrived she asked me from the window “where’s your sister?” I said that I left her and ran away. My mum said that she will take me home but I will be grounded. 

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